After my discussion with Nigel, I felt much more confident in the current state of my thesis. The ability to get a second pair of eyes on the work and be able to hear from my assessor which areas need a bit of improving is absolutely vital in providing me with the best preparation for submission as well as allowing me to step outside of my own mind and see what makes sense and what doesn’t.
The day before my session with Nigel, I’d closed the opinion survey I was using to collect the data I needed to finish my findings and conclusion, though I hadn’t looked at the results yet. Speaking to Nigel beforehand helped me get a better idea of the direction I want to take my data analysis in.
His biggest overall criticism was that the choice of language I was using was rather emotive and gave an inappropriately opinionated tone. I expected this evaluation to some degree, as I write very quickly and tend to pour too much of my own mind into my words.
My next step is to incorporate the charts I’ve made regarding my data into my methodology, findings, discussion, and conclusion; then revise the full thesis to edit for length and remove subjective phrasing.